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Band 7

Vehicles using alternative fuel have been available since the past few years, yet they are not common on the roads. What are the reasons for this? How can people be encouraged to use these vehicles?

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Even though automobiles started using different types of fuel, they are not easily captured in the outside world. Electric cars and bikes have been open to the public for more than five years yet the response is low. Let us discuss the reasons behind
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 nature and figure out the ways through which pupils can use them shortly. Companies are exploring various options to satisfy customers by offering them affordable choices.
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, previously Diesel and Petrol were the only ways to run a car or bike. As the years passed,
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 the heavy price rates new inventions happened. Elon Musk started the project of EV cars in 2008 and those cars are called Tesla. The average waiting time is set to be more than 1.5 years upon which the public started backing off. The main reason discouraging customers in India is the higher cost of electric vehicles and their insurance premiums and there are fewer charging stations in India compared to Europe or North America.
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, there are a plethora of ways to bring attention from the people.
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, awareness of the product by arranging workshops and seminars.
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, In India chief minister is offering electric scooters for women and has taken the first step. Apart from these government needs to take the initiative by explaining the benefits
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 as less air pollution. In conclusion, I would say that spreading more information and explaining the advantages plays a vital role. Cost should
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 be taken into consideration if the industries are targeting lower audiences.

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introduction
You need to ensure clarity in the introduction by presenting the topic and your main points more succinctly. Avoid overgeneralization and clearly indicate what the subsequent paragraphs will discuss.
logical structure
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the logical flow of ideas and ensure paragraphs are well-structured and cohesive. Some ideas were presented abruptly without clear connections to previous statements.
supported main points
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea, and all sentences within that paragraph support that idea. Be careful with general statements and make sure to include detailed, specific examples to support your points.
complete response
Your essay must fully address all parts of the task. Make sure to explore the reasons for the low uptake of alternative fuel vehicles as well as suggest solutions in equal measure.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure your main ideas are not just stated but also expanded upon with clear, focused explanations and examples.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate a variety of specific examples to illustrate your points more effectively. This provides evidence for your arguments and makes your essay more persuasive.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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