Annual Rainfall in Kona, Hawaii The graph and table below show the average monthly rainfalls and average annual rainfalls for three towns in the district of Kona in Hawaii for a 30-year period (1971-2000). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

Annual Rainfall in Kona, Hawaii

The graph and table below show the average monthly rainfalls and average annual rainfalls for three towns in the district of Kona in Hawaii for a 30-year period (1971-2000).

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words
The line graph
illustrate
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the
rate
of monthly
rainfall
and the
rate
of
rainfall
for three
town
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towns
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in the district of Kona in Hawaii period 1971 to 2000.
Overall
, Kainaliu had a
rate
of precipitation on
period
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the period
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of Juni to September for
a
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30 years. Based on the data, the highest
rainfall's
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rainfall
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level
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in
three
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the three
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village
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villages
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were
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in july
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july
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July
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and
september
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September
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. It was noted that the Holualua had a figure of
rate
monthly
rainfall
at 12 centimetres in July, and
then
the Kainaliu had a number of
rate
at about 17 centimetres in September.
At
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same
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the same
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month, the Opihihale had
a
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highest
rate
of
rainfall
at about 11
centimetre
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centimetres
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. The
Desember
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December
was the month with the lowest
of
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precipitation along
of
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the year. In the Holualua, it decreased to the lowest at below 6
centimetre
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centimetres
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. In the Opihihale, it
decleaned
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decreased
to about 6,2
that
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before
had
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fluctutation
along
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over
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the year, and in the Kainaliu, it went
go
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down sharply to 6,3 centimetres.
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