You have just moved to a new place. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter. -tell him/her you moved and why you moved -describe the new place -invite your friend to visit and suggest what to do.

#place #friend #-tell #-describe #-invite #visit

Dear Baiden, I hope

this

email finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing

this

letter to share some information, as I have recently moved to another new place. As you know I have been living in Kingstown for a long time with my family members. But I moved to Queenstown from Kingstown

last

week and

this

is because I got a new opportunity in a multinational company as a human resources manager.

However

, I would like to describe about Queenstown.

Although

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Queenstown is densely populated, I love

this

place because of the easy transportation systems

as well as

the traditional foods.

Additionally

, people are very friendly and the weather is very comfortable in

this

area. Since we have not met for a long time, I am inviting you to visit

this

place at your convenience.

Furthermore

, I have a plan to travel with you to The Flower Garden and The Fish World which are the most tourist attraction places in

this

town. I hope you will accept my invitation and I look forward to hearing from you soon. All the best. Donald Trump

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better clarity. The logical flow is good, but some paragraphs can be elaborated further for enhanced coherence.

task achievement

Make sure all parts of the task are fully addressed. Include more specific details about your reasons for moving, descriptions of the new place, and the suggested activities for when your friend visits.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

189 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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