Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work that with their children To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answers.
Some people
belive
that youngsters are involved in social conflicts Correct your spelling
believe
due to
the negligence of their parents
because they are swampped
in their work . I agree with Correct your spelling
swamped
swapped
notion
that lack of time for their children Add an article
the notion
cause
harmful impacts on their Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
overall
personality.
To commence with, in this
modern era, parents
run after the money to give lavish life to their younger ones but they forget presences
is equally important for them Fix the agreement mistake
presence
which
plays a crucial and significant role . All the Correct word choice
and
parents
have capacity
to shape their children's character and give them advice to become better Change the article
the capacity
version
of themselves. Due Fix the agreement mistake
versions
the
lack of support from their Change preposition
to the
elders
they Add a comma
elders,
loose
their confidence and positivity and involved in social problems. Replace the word
lose
For instance
, as per Bombay Add a comma
news,
news
40% of people in the metropolitan cities have hired baby Capitalize word
News
sitter
to take care of them and both Fix the agreement mistake
sitters
parents
continue their work .
Moreover
, juveniles feel isolated at their
home , they have all the materialistic items Correct pronoun usage
apply
however
, they do not have love , compassion and empathy from their parents
thus
, not getting appropriate gestures from their elders lead
their childhood Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
in
Change preposition
to
the
negativity and they indulge in Correct article usage
apply
the
bad company. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, by choosing Correct article usage
the wrong
wrong
friends they can commit crimes and involved in drugs which will ruin their whole Correct article usage
the wrong
life
.Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For instance
, as per the local survey conducted by.police officers majority of the criminals are younger ones who belongs
to Correct subject-verb agreement
belong
the
reputed families.
Correct article usage
apply
To conclude
, presence
of Correct article usage
the presence
parents
in the life of children is very important, they can share their valuable experiences with their little ones and save them from committing any mistakes also
, Correct word choice
and also
fullfilled
their journey with immense happiness and care.Correct your spelling
fulfil
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