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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There is a pie chart and a table
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 the percentage of
tourists
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 who are going to Australia for
holiday
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a holiday
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 at a particular resort.
Overall
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, the pie chart provides
the
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information about the percentage of
tourists
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 based on their region,
while
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, the table provides
the
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details about the
tourists
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. In decreasing order, the
tourists
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 come from Asia, Europe, US, and other countries. The
tourists
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 who come to Australia are dominated by Asian people, which is about 37%. Based on the table, it is known that
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most Asian
tourists
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 will spend 7 days in 5-star
hotel
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hotels
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. The next two are the European and the US, about 35% and 18%, respectively. The average of their stay is quite similar, around 14-16 days.
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, the European prefer to stay in a
camp site
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campsite
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 or a caravan,
while
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 the US prefer to stay in a 4-star hotel.
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, the other countries are worth significantly less, only about 10%. They like to stay around 10 days, and similar to the
European
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Europeans
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, they prefer to stay in a
camp site
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campsite
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 or a caravan.
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, they have different
kind
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kinds
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 of activities they like, except for Asian and American
tourists
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, they both love to do sightseeing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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