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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
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The map shows the layout of
Paris
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the Paris
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centre
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, including two potential restaurants.
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,
it is clear that
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 the
centre
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 is surrounded by various activities with
bunch
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a bunch
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 of
visitors
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 each day. There are four activities near the left bank in the south of the
city
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 where the second possible
restaurant
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 is located and over to the north side connected by three bridges across the River Seine to the right bank with three different activities and the first possible
restaurant
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. Looking at the map closely, the first candidate
restaurant
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 is located in the northwest part of the
city
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centre
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 near the north park on the right side and
visitors
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 can
reached
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reach
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 the first
restaurant
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's location by crossing the Bir-Hakeim Bridge. As for
this
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 choice, there are 10.000 possible
visitors
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 that can come across
this
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 location. Meanwhile,
for
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apply
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the second candidate
restaurant
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 is located near
to
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apply
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the
city
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's landmark in the southern of the
city
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 with the highest
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 where the landmark
located
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is located
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in
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apply
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between the Art Gallery in the southeast and the Sports
Centre
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 on the southwest side of the Eiffel Tower.
Visitors
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 who are located in the north of the
city
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 can
easyly
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easily
reached
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reach
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this
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 second location in two ways by crossing Lena Bridge and Debilly Footbridge.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, visitors, city, restaurant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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