The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
The map shows the layout of
Paris
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the Paris
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centre
, including two potential restaurants.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
centre
is surrounded by various activities with
bunch
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a bunch
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of
visitors
each day. There are four activities near the left bank in the south of the
city
where the second possible
restaurant
is located and over to the north side connected by three bridges across the River Seine to the right bank with three different activities and the first possible
restaurant
. Looking at the map closely, the first candidate
restaurant
is located in the northwest part of the
city
centre
near the north park on the right side and
visitors
can
reached
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reach
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the first
restaurant
's location by crossing the Bir-Hakeim Bridge. As for
this
choice, there are 10.000 possible
visitors
that can come across
this
location. Meanwhile,
for
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apply
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the second candidate
restaurant
is located near
to
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apply
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the
city
's landmark in the southern of the
city
with the highest
visitors
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number of visitors
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where the landmark
located
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is located
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in
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apply
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between the Art Gallery in the southeast and the Sports
Centre
on the southwest side of the Eiffel Tower.
Visitors
who are located in the north of the
city
can
easyly
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easily
reached
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reach
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this
second location in two ways by crossing Lena Bridge and Debilly Footbridge.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, visitors, city, restaurant with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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