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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that
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 can represent
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a
person
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’s culture and
character
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. but I argue that type of
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 isn’t
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 to
about
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a
person
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’s culture and
character
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the latter view.
Although
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 there is no doubt that clothing can reflect a
person
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's
character
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 and personal image . Clothing style can
also
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 reflect a
person
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's
personality
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.
For example
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, a
person
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 who prefers a simple style may be calm and pragmatic,
while
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 a
person
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 who prefers a romantic style may be emotional .
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, I would argue that
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isn’t necessarily represent
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 a
person
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's
character
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 and
personality
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.
Clothes
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is
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 only the appearance of a
person
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,
can
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 not be judged by
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appearance alone.
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, clothing reflects only one aspect of a
person
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's
personality
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, not the whole. Different cultural backgrounds and social environments
also
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 have an impact on the choice of clothing. In some cultures, dressing conservatively is seen as a sign of respect and modesty,
while
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 in others it may be seen as stuffy and backward. Some people may deliberately dress to show the image they want to show, rather than
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 real
character
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 and
personality
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.
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, certain people may dress very formally for work needs, but casually in private. In conclusion，their choice of
clothes
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 reflected from surface phenomena, different cultural
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 and the needs of different occasions is difficult to judge. So I disagree
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this
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 view
that is
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 a lot about a
person
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’s culture and
character
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 from their choice of
clothes
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction should introduce the topic and state your position clearly. Each body paragraph should contain a central idea and be expanded with specific examples and explanations. The conclusion should summarize your points and restate your main argument coherently.
task achievement
To fully address the task, ensure that you thoroughly discuss the reasons why you agree or disagree with the statement. Include relevant, detailed examples that demonstrate your understanding of how clothing relates to culture and character. Try to explore the implications and complexities of the topic to add depth to your response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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