33.The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a Europena university had from 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

33.The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a Europena university had from 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph demonstrates how many international students applied for a specific university in Europe over a four-year period between 2004 and 2008.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that the Japanese applicants gradually lost their interest in the university,
while
, the Americans increased
significantlly
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significantly
over the period in question.
Also
evident is,
Japan
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that Japan
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doubled from 5000
student
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to 10000 by 2008.
In contrast
, Chinese applicants witnessed a gradual decrease from about 2800 to 15000. Another important fact is Russia formed the smallest number of candidates over the studied period.
In other words
, in 2004 it started to rise from about 1000 and peaked at around 8000 in 2007.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • comparison
  • applicant numbers
  • peak years
  • growth
  • decline
  • pattern
  • influence
  • factors
  • diplomatic relationships
  • economic conditions
  • demand
  • convergence
  • divergence
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