The promoters of social media claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before. While critics claim that social media site often impinges upon one’s privacy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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social communication and content sharing. others argue that it is often bleaching
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privacy more than ever before.
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essay will delve into both viewpoints and explain my
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life
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of celebrities and politicians
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social
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pictures are circulated in social
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has more influence on youngsters, they
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fake profiles
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social
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. There
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a report per international web monitoring watch that several social
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fake profiles are influencing youngsters.
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, the
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social
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enables the communication among people more than ever before.
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social
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can used to communicate the friends and relatives
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. By visiting social
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profile
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, the
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about the
peers
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life
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are accessible which
connect
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them.
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seperated
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separated
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school friends can find each other and restore their connection using
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social
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and relatives should not be
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