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It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheap clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#clothes #lots
There are various cloth designs
produce
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 from the different brand industries in the market especially female attire nowadays. Numerous people find that good
price
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prices
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 with premium
quality
 clothes are more
worthy
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than
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the
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budget or thrift clothes and high-
quality
 garments are more sustainable in terms of duration. To commence with, spending a bit more
in
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 the superior pieces may look a bit expensive at first.
Additionally
, that kind of
quality
are
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 carefully chosen by the tailors and built with
the
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premium fabric and materials which have proven to
be having
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 less allergic reactions. Its durability ensures that it remains in excellent condition .
For instance
, washing the cheaper alternative multiple times
result
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results
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 in fated in colour, out of shape and wear and tear easily,
thus
, needed for
the
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frequent replacement.
Moreover
, people
starts
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 to practice minimalism, which means a simple lifestyle. By buying solid colour clothes and
pari
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pair
 the outfit with the existing pieces from the wardrobe. It could save
the
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them
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 from choosing the outfit,
besides
, buying a large quantity over the
quality
 garments may result in demand for the place in wardrobes. In conclusion, investing in better
quality
 and expensive clothing can align with the
principle
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principles
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 of sustainability and durability. It benefits in
long-term
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the long-term
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economic
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by reducing the space in the room.
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Task Response
Ensure your introduction clearly presents the topic and your position on it. Maintain consistency in your point of view throughout the essay to strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and organize the ideas in paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one clear main idea with supporting sentences that relate directly to it.
Coherence and Cohesion
To fully expand your main points, use specific examples that directly support your argument. Avoid general statements and make sure your examples illustrate your points clearly.
Task Response
Work on developing each paragraph with clear, comprehensive ideas that relate to the prompt. Make sure that the connection between the ideas and the prompt is evident throughout the essay to achieve completeness.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • long-lasting
  • cost-per-wear
  • economical
  • investing
  • ethical manufacturing
  • transparent
  • exclusivity
  • designs
  • mass-produced
  • accessibility
  • budget
  • fast fashion
  • trends
  • maintenance
  • dry cleaning
  • social status
  • psychological implications
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