The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph provides information about how many people visit each of the two brand-new websites over the
period
of fifteen days.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that Pop Parade had by far the most visitors and Music Choice experienced a fluctuation
trend
over the
period
shown. At the beginning of the
period
, Pop Parade with around 120 visitors was the most popular web than Music Choice,
then
the figure saw a downward
trend
until the seventh
day
, from
this
point on it witnessed an upward
trend
and reached approximately 150, after that, the figure experienced a fluctuation
trend
until peaked at about 170 in the fifteenth
day
. as regards Music Choice, visits to
this
website started at nearly 40 and fluctuated until the eleventh
day
,
then
there was a sharp rise to about 120 until the next
day
, and it peaked at just under 120 until the next two days.
thereupon
the figure falls down to just under 80
at the end
of the
period
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, trend, day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Music sites
  • Web traffic
  • Number of visits
  • Trend analysis
  • Initial phase
  • Steady increase
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant change
  • Peaks
  • Turning point
  • Growth rate
  • Seasonal variation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Long-term trend
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