The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games.

Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The table depicts the
medals
derived by the highest
rank
of London 2012 Olympic Games winners.
Overall
, from an overview perspective, we can see that
amidst
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among
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the top ten nations, the United
States
collected the most
medals
and placed them in the first
rank
while
Australia had the least
medals
and came up as the
last
rank
.
To begin
with, as a winner, the United
States
dominated all of the
medals
acquisition.
In addition
,
gained
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the
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total
104
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of 104
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awards,
United
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the United
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States
has collected 46 gold, 29 silver, and 29
bronze
trophies
.
Moreover
, there is no other nation
surpass
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surpassing
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the United
States
trophies
acquisition except for Russia, which collected 3 more
bronze
medals
than
United
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the United
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States
(32
bronze
badges). As the
runner up
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, China got 88 badges with 38 gold, 27 silver, and 23
bronze
trophies
. Not in tight condition, Great Britain, came up as second runner up, acquired 65
trophies
in total. Russia obtained a greater number of
trophies
than Great Britain, it only had 8
trophies
difference
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from China.
However
, Russia can only
stood
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at
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in
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fourth
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position since it has
less
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fewer
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gold
medals
compare
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compared
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to Great Britain.
Additionally
, three nations stood at
bottom
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the bottom
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three of the
rank
there are Italy, Hungary, and Australia which collected 28, 17, and 35 badges in total, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, rank, states, bronze, trophies with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Winter Olympic Games
  • medal count
  • medal tally
  • gold, silver, bronze medals
  • ranking
  • dominant countries
  • athletic performance
  • medal standings
  • podium finishes
  • olympic achievements
  • top contenders
  • competitive edge
  • historical record
  • national pride
  • sportsmanship
  • medal distribution
  • overall trend
  • athletic prowess
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