The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The table depicts the
medals
derived by the highest rank
of London 2012 Olympic Games winners. Overall
, from an overview perspective, we can see that amidst
the top ten nations, the United Change preposition
among
States
collected the most medals
and placed them in the first rank
while
Australia had the least medals
and came up as the last
rank
.
To begin
with, as a winner, the United States
dominated all of the medals
acquisition. In addition
, gained
Wrong verb form
gaining
the
total Correct article usage
a
104
awards, Change preposition
of 104
United
Correct article usage
the United
States
has collected 46 gold, 29 silver, and 29 bronze
trophies
. Moreover
, there is no other nation surpass
the United Wrong verb form
surpassing
States
trophies
acquisition except for Russia, which collected 3 more bronze
medals
than United
Correct article usage
the United
States
(32 bronze
badges).
As the runner up
, China got 88 badges with 38 gold, 27 silver, and 23 Add a hyphen
runner-up
bronze
trophies
. Not in tight condition, Great Britain, came up as second runner up, acquired 65 trophies
in total. Russia obtained a greater number of trophies
than Great Britain, it only had 8 trophies
difference
from China. Replace the word
different
However
, Russia can only stood
Change the verb form
stand
at
Change preposition
in
fourth
position since it has Add an article
the fourth
less
gold Change the quantifier
fewer
medals
compare
to Great Britain. Change the form of the verb
compared
Additionally
, three nations stood at bottom
three of the Correct article usage
the bottom
rank
there are Italy, Hungary, and Australia which collected 28, 17, and 35 badges in total, respectively.Submitted by hiitsmeee on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, rank, states, bronze, trophies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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