The problem of homelessness is on the rise in several significant urban centers globally. What is the main cause of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it by communities and governments?
The main cause of homelessness is
jobless
, having no Replace the word
joblessness
job
you will stay no where
in Join the words
nowhere
place
that dream of, because of that Correct article usage
the place
jobless
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joblessness
the
problem for big Correct article usage
a
city
to Fix the agreement mistake
cities
be resolved
. By any chance, Wrong verb form
resolve
jobless
will Add a missing verb
being jobless
effect
not only Correct your spelling
affect
to
one person Change preposition
apply
to
whom have no Change preposition
apply
job
but also
to
his or her family Change preposition
apply
such
as husband
or wife and Correct article usage
the husband
kids
they Correct article usage
the kids
own
. Many countries have Verb problem
have
strategy
to take control Fix the agreement mistake
strategies
the
increasing of jobless, but somehow the impact of natural Change preposition
of the
disaster
like Fix the agreement mistake
disasters
covid-19
affected Correct your spelling
COVID-19
to
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apply
the
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apply
economy
growth. The rapid infection to the Replace the word
economic
poeple
effected to stop people Correct your spelling
people
for
working, Change preposition
from
Correct word choice
and finally
finally
people Add a comma
finally,
do
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did
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a job
job
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jobs
then
they can
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could
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a house
the house
house
. The measure to solve homelessness is the state must have Fix the agreement mistake
houses
policy
to provide Correct article usage
a policy
job
opportunity
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opportunities
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the people, and Correct your spelling
to
also
endorse if job
opportunity
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opportunities
asked
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meet
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Structure
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Make sure to start your essay with an introductory paragraph that presents the topic and a concluding paragraph that summarizes your points and restates your position.
Cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas. The points mentioned are somewhat disorganized. Use paragraphs to separate your ideas and clearly link them with cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'In addition', 'However', etc.
Development
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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