Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose. Others believe that it is merely a distraction from real life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some argue that
art
plays an important role in our emotion
in order to bring meaningful and purposeful memories, Fix the agreement mistake
emotions
while
a few people
think that art
is just a thing seperating
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separating
people
from real life. In this
essay, I will clarify both views and express my opinions.
Actually, art
is an endless source of inspiration to humans and it is
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has
surviving
from primitive times until now, through many years, Wrong verb form
survived
art
is still an essential and useful tool for everyone from saving memories, knowledge
to upgrading Correct word choice
and knowledge
people
's mood
. In Fix the agreement mistake
moods
real-life
, the Correct your spelling
real life
beauty
of art
not only admire
but Correct subject-verb agreement
admires
also
bring
commercial Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
values
for painters. Fix the agreement mistake
value
For instance
, every year always organizes some exhibitions of many well-known painters, after ending of a
event, it not only attracts individuals that come to pay a visit or take some pictures but Change the article
an
also
has big profits from those.
In entertainment, art
is a place for emotions. When someone feels injured, sad or tired because of the busy
of our lives or several Replace the word
busyness
criticizitions
from Correct your spelling
criticisms
people
around them, they will looking
for Change the verb form
look
be looking
art
to find peaceful and comfortable from these
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this beauty
these beauties
beauty
. On the other hand
, with every individual having a happy life, art
will be a mirror to demonstrate their happinesses
with many different bright Change the wording
happiness
states of happiness
feelings of happiness
colors
and bring energy to our souls. In the past, Change the spelling
colours
art
is a tool assisting people
save
important events or historical moments. There are not only pictures but Add the particle
to save
also
portraits or sculptures to remember about our ancestors and heroes.
However
, these days, a few people
has
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have
misunderstand
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misunderstood
about
the truth Change preposition
apply
beauty
of Correct word choice
and beauty
art
. By this
I mean, the truth
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true
beauty
of its
does not from pictures, it Correct pronoun usage
it
froms
the soul of Correct your spelling
forms
from
a
artist. A few individuals believe that if they just exhibit them in some Change the article
an
art
galleries, it will be called art
, but this
is entirely wrong. For example
, Quang Dai - a paintist
organizes Correct your spelling
painter
paints
a
exhibition called "How are you Change the article
an
these day
?", Change the determiner
this day
these days
this
causes
many debates and several Wrong verb form
caused
expertises
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expertise
claim
that Wrong verb form
claimed
this
is not art
and not
everyone taking a pen will become a Correct word choice
that not
paintist
. Correct your spelling
painter
Due to a
few Change preposition
A
phenomenons
like that, Replace the word
phenomena
they
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apply
makes
us misunderstand Change the verb form
make
about
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apply
art
. That's why several people
feel that art
makes people
not concentrate on the
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apply
real-life
.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
real life
art
does not separate us from real-life
, but it is a mirror that Correct your spelling
real life
show
us a comprehensive Change the verb form
shows
looking
Replace the word
look
on
our lives in present.Change preposition
at
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas are developed logically throughout the essay. Use topic sentences and cohesive devices effectively to guide the reader.
task achievement
Expand and clarify your ideas, ensuring you consistently address the topic and fully develop both sides of the argument, including your own opinion, in a balanced manner.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support the arguments made. Ensure the examples are detailed and relevant to the topic to strengthen the impact of your arguments.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.