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Nowadays more and more people read news on the Internet. Nevertheless, newspapers will remain an important source of news and information for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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This
 essay agrees that
although
 a lot of
people
 have shifted their way of reading
news
 from the
newspapers
 to the
Internet
, the
newspapers
 will remain
to be
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the major source of information.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that
news
 on the
Internet
 only covers the headlines of the stories,
while
on the other
hand
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newspapers
 could lay out facts in more detailed manners compared to the
news
 on the
Internet
. Most of the websites on the
Internet
 only write their
news
 as a summary since they need to limit their
pages
 to keep
people
 interested in reading it. When a
news
 website has a quite long page, readers will be bored and tend to skip it.
For instance
, on
the
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average, BBC
News
pages
 only have two to three
pages
 of
news
 because they want to keep their readers following their stories.
On the contrary
,
newspapers
 have been a long-standing media for
people
 to know what is going on in the world currently because
it
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 can bring out facts with detailed chronologies and
not
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are not
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 limited to
pages
 as their word fonts are quite small.
Moreover
,
newspapers’
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 readers are already used to
handle
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 a lot of
pages
 when reading
news
,
therefore
, they are more comfortable reading the
news
 in it.
For example
, USA Today’s
newspapers
’ average
pages
 per story could be up to 5
pages
 long and have not experienced any
decreasing
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 in buyers up to
this
 time.
To conclude
,
while
 nowadays the
Internet
 has provided numerous websites for
news
,
people
 are still relying on
newspapers
 because they can fully cover the
news
 with detailed facts and not just headlines and summaries.
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