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describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.
The bar graph illustrates the changes in
average
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the average
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 annual Gross Domestic Product (GDP) produced in three types of
countries
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, which are wealthy, globalised and non-globalised
countries
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 over a period of approximately 40 years from 1960 to 1999. As reflected by the y-axis, the growth is measured from zero per cent to the maximum at 5.0 per cent. At first glance, it becomes clear each type of country experiences different trends in the growth of average domestic products. Wealthy
countries
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 and globalised
countries
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 show significantly increased and decreased trends respectively,
while
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 non-globalised
countries
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 experience a fluctuating amount. In more detail, wealthy
countries
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 show a significantly decreased number, started approximately 4.8% in the 1960s

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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