The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The pie chart illustrates how many
presentages
sales retail field of online shopping between 2003 and 2013 in Correct your spelling
percentages
presents
new
Zealand.
Capitalize word
New
Overall
, film or music and travel Linking Words
were
Verb problem
had
highest
proportion of internet Add an article
the highest
shop
Fix the agreement mistake
shops
while
clothes and books Linking Words
were
Verb problem
had
lowest
proportion of website Add an article
the lowest
a lowest
shop
.
Fix the agreement mistake
shops
To begin
, cinema or music Linking Words
experienced
rose at 12% from 21% in 2003 to 33% in 2013. Replace the word
experience
Likewise
, books Linking Words
were
Verb problem
apply
slight
fell 3% from 19% became 22%. In 2013, people Change the word
slightly
prefere
Correct your spelling
preferred
spend
money Fix the infinitive
to spend
in
film or music Change preposition
on
while
in 2003 they Linking Words
choosed
to spend Correct your spelling
choose
chose
Correct pronoun usage
it at
at
travel field, it could Change preposition
on
see
from the Wrong verb form
be seen
amout
of them Correct your spelling
number
did
website shopping.
Correct pronoun usage
who did
On the other hand
, Linking Words
compared
between 2003 and 2013, clothes Verb problem
apply
were decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
8
%. Change preposition
by 8
Furthermore
, travel Linking Words
also
Linking Words
drop
from 2003 with Change the verb form
drops
Correct article usage
a presentage
presentage
Correct your spelling
percentage
36
% to 2013 with Change preposition
of 36
Correct article usage
a presentage
presentage
Correct your spelling
percentage
29
%. Change preposition
of 29
This
drop was in Linking Words
exact
7%.Change the word
exactly
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