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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. the table shows where the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. the table shows where the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed.
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The table and bar charts provide information about the
sources
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 and spending of the
budget
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 of Britain police between 2017 and 2018. The table illustrates the three different
sources
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 of income,
while
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 the pie charts show the expenditure of the financial plan.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a large amount of money was spent on the officer’s and staff’s salaries rather than building, transport and technology.
Moreover
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, the national government is the only source, giving a huge amount of
budget
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 yearly,
while
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 the local taxes and other
sources
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 account for a minor portion. In 2017, the police had a
budget
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 of 304.4
million
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, which rose significantly to 318.6
million
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 in 2018. The majority of
this
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 funding provided by the national government accounted for 175.5
million
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 pounds in 2017, which increased slightly in the next year to 177.8
million
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.
However
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, 91.2
million
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 received from the local taxes in 2017, and 102.3
million
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 in 2018. Other
sources
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 (eg grants) account for the smallest portion of the financial
budget
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; they gave 38
Million
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 in 2017 and 38.5 in 2018, which is moderately stable.
On the other hand
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, a large portion of the financial
budget
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 was spent on the officer’s and staff’s salaries in both years. Salaries received 75% and 69% of the
budget
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 in 2017 and 2018 respectively.
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, in both years, 17% of the money was spent on building and transport,
while
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 the expenditure on technology increased from 8% to 14% in 2018 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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