The diagram shows how apple is canned.

The diagram shows how apple is canned.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows how apple is canned.
The graph depicts how apples are selected and prepared before canning.
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, the procedure of producing apple can is comprised of 13 stages which are rather simple. The process starts when apples which are picked by hand are transported to factories in order to be washed. Afterwards, their quality must be checked to get rid of those that are spoiled;
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is followed by storing them in a cold place. What happened next is weighting which is done with the aim of grading them. In the following
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, apples are peeled to be ready for slicing and corning to throw out the peel and pips;
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, they are ready to be canned. Once cans are prepared they must spend the “sealing”
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. Subsequent to the cooking
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, sterilizing the cans, the details and information are attached to the jars by means of labels.
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, all the cans are stored in warehouses which
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step is called “storage”; when
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stage
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is complete, the process ends with despatching.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Canning
  • Preservation
  • Sterilization
  • Hygiene
  • Quality control
  • Shelf life
  • Pasteurization
  • Airtight
  • Food safety
  • Perishable goods
  • Batch
  • Conveyor belt
  • Retort
  • Vacuum-sealing
  • Sanitization
  • Distribution
  • Environmental sustainability
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