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The graph below shows the number o f tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number o f tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph shows the
amount
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number
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 of people
traveling
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travelling
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 to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 over
a
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an
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eight year
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eight-year
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 period starting from 2010.
Overall
, the total population of tourists
in
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on
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Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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is increasing
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increased
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 slightly from 2010 to 2016 around 1
million
 to 2.75
million
 but in 2017 the number of
visitors
 dramatically
grow
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grew
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 from 2.75
millions
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million
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 to 3.5
millions
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million
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. People who stay on cruise are an increasing trend from 2012 to 2017. 0.25
million
 escalating to 2
million
 respectively. There is no
significantly
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significant
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 difference number of travelers between 2010 to 2012 approximately 0.3
million
 travelers.
However
,
visitors
 who
stay
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stayed
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 on the island
are
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apply
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steadily
shifting
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shifted
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 between 2010 to 2012 from 0.75
million
 in 2010 and 2011 to 1.25
million
 in 2012. By the way, from 2013 to 2017 the number of
visitors
 are almost the same
which
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with
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 around 1.25 to 1.5
million
in of
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apply
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the
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apply
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visitors
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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