The graph below shows the number o f tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

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of people

traveling

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Caribbean

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the Caribbean

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island

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eight year

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period starting from 2010.

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, the total population of tourists

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Caribbean

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slightly from 2010 to 2016 around 1

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to 2.75

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but in 2017 the number of

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dramatically

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to 3.5

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. People who stay on cruise are an increasing trend from 2012 to 2017. 0.25

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escalating to 2

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respectively. There is no

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difference number of travelers between 2010 to 2012 approximately 0.3

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travelers.

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visitors

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on the island

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between 2010 to 2012 from 0.75

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in 2010 and 2011 to 1.25

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in 2012. By the way, from 2013 to 2017 the number of

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are almost the same

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around 1.25 to 1.5

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, visitors with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

144 words

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The graph below shows the number o f tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

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The youth in many countries are unemployed and unskilled, while at the same time, the military services are in need of people. Compulsory military service is beneficial and necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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