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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledgement or experience.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #knowledgement
Nowadays,
Internet
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 has an important role
of
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 the digital world.
Everyone
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 able to connect with the globe online including
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
.
People
 can access
to
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everything
everytime
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 and everywhere using only cellular data. I somewhat agree that in the next
generations
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 there will be no more physical
books
 and newspapers. In
this
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 I will explain why I believe
this
 idea.
Firstly
, most
of
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libraries develop an application and purchase the
books
 online for
the
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readers from all over the world.
This
is give
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 a lot of
benefit
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for
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to
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 buyers who are interested in various
type
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types
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books
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of books
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able
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and able
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 to do everything in one click.
For example
, there is an application
call
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 'TK Park' which is a public library online for
people
 in every
countries
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 to access and read
books
 using only
smartphone
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smartphones
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 and
internet
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the internet
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.
However
, Many
people
 will disagree with the idea above. Some of the readers especially the elders love to spend their time
to explore
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 different
books
 in the bookstore and
smell
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smelling
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 the
piece
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pieces
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 of
papers
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paper
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. In conclusion, I believe that
in
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the
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 few years later it
would
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will
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 be
the
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 different world for the global trend of reading. There will be
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a large
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large
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a large
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 amount of online
books
 and
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content
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contents
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content
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 for the readers to enjoy. But I think there will be
the
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room for the
people
 who enjoy
read
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reading
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 real
books
 and newspapers.
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your view. While you mentioned that you 'somewhat agree,' it would be clearer if you elaborated on this stance a bit more.
Task Achievement
Work on developing your main points with more elaborate explanations and examples. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, followed by supporting details and examples.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve the coherence, make sure each paragraph has clear transitions and link words that smoothly guide the reader through your argument.
Task Achievement
Provide a balanced discussion by examining both sides of the argument and giving equal development to your reasons for agreement and disagreement.
Task Achievement
Use a wider range of grammatical structures and vocabulary to demonstrate language flexibility and precision.
Coherence & Cohesion
End your essay with a stronger conclusion that summarizes your points and reiterates your stance in a compelling way.

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