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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the weekly consumption of
fish
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 and other types of meat, namely
chicken
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,
beef
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, and
lamb
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, in one European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, the
grams
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 of consumed
chicken
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 rose steadily throughout the
period
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,
while
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 the figure for
beef
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 and
lamb
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 experienced a downward trajectory. The consumption of
fish
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 remained relatively stable over the whole
period
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. Regarding
beef
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 and
lamb
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, in 1979, the amount of
beef
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 eaten was the highest, showing around 220
grams
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 per person per week and
then
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, it fell sharply by nearly 50
grams
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 in 1981. Starting in 1982, it showed a dramatic rise for a
while
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 and
then
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, dropped significantly from 240
grams
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 to almost 120
grams
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 in the final year. The proportion of
lamb
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also
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 showed a similar pattern, beginning at 150
grams
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 in 1979 and ending close to 75
grams
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 in 2004. Turning to
chicken
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 and
fish
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, the amount of
chicken
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 consumed stood at just under 150
grams
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 per week in 1979. It overtook the
beef
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 with just over 200
grams
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 in 1989 and continued its upward trend until the end of the
period
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.
In contrast
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, the figure for
fish
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 remained relatively steady throughout the whole
period
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, from 60
grams
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 weekly consumption in 1979 to around 40
grams
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 in 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chicken, beef, lamb, grams, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • steady increase
  • most consumed meat
  • relatively stable
  • general decline
  • pronounced decline
  • over the years
  • throughout the period
  • depicts
  • span
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