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the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it

the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it
The plans show the
school
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 in 1985 and now, after redevelopment.
Overall
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, the
school
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 added new facilities for students, which led to an increase in the population of
this
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 educational institute. The classroom block had been expanded from 2 storeys to 3,
also
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 the number of them grew and were placed just after the main block and in the centre of the
school
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 as
one
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 faces the building. Upon entering, the sports facilities,
such
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 as a pool and fitness centre were added on the right side of the field. The library was replaced by a resource centre with a computer room in it, which is located on the right side after
one
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 goes through the main office.
In addition
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, the
school
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 has more car parking places, including
one
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, which faces the office and
one
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 just before the road.
Moreover
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, the road was changed in shape and replaced a bit of car park.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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