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The maps below illustrate a beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and today.

The maps below illustrate a beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and today.
The first
map
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 displays a beachfront area in Australia,
while
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 the second
map
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 illustrates how it looks now. Looking at an
overall
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 perspective, after seven decades, the local beachfront area has been modified and upgraded as it is visible on the current
map
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 that some buildings are no more and new ones have been established. It is evident that in 1950, the road which led to the parking area was a dead-end,
however
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, it has been expanded until it reached the lighthouse. Beside the 25m
pool
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 on the east side of the beach, a surfing club was constructed. On the west side of the beach, the previously 25m
pool
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 was upgraded to a 50m
pool
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.
It is clear that
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 a restaurant was built,
as well as
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 another surfing club which is located in between the newly-built restaurant and the
pool
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. Another notable change can be seen on the
map
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, as the playground which existed in 1950 is no longer there and has been replaced by a parking lot.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, pool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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