Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent agree/ disagree.
There is an opinion asserting that the budget allocated to
railways
should be prior to roads. A lot can be inferred from this
claim, an also
this
interpretation can give
us some ideas about Rephrase
also give
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its
it's
reasons. I agree with the given statement on the basis of decreasing air pollution and reducing road accidents.
The main reason is thatCorrect your spelling
its
,
It could be possible for more individuals to be transferred by public transportation Remove the comma
apply
such
as trains
. This
kind of vehicle leads to relocation
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the relocation
the
vast majority of people from one to Change preposition
of the
other point
. Change the wording
another point
other points
Therefore
, the more trains
and railways
are provided the more people tend to use
these as a transmit instead
of their own car. Hence
, the traffic congestion and this
is followed by air pollution are bount
to decrease.
Correct your spelling
bound
In addition
, another compelling reason for more investment on
Change preposition
in
railways
is that if governments supply better situation
for Fix the agreement mistake
situations
trains
and subways which need more and safer railways
it will cause use
almost everyone Verb problem
apply
use
shared transport Fix the infinitive
to use
than
drive Rephrase
rather than
private
car for travelling or even attending Add an article
a private
the private
workplace
. Take Japan and Add an article
the workplace
china
as an example; there are a few Capitalize word
China
number of
people who Correct quantifier usage
apply
use
their car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
due to
numerous
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the numerous
of
Change preposition
apply
trains
. Hence
, in this
situation less
vehicles are Correct quantifier usage
apply
in
Change preposition
on
roads
and Correct article usage
the roads
accident
would Fix the agreement mistake
accidents
fall
over time.
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occur
To conclude
, I personally take the view that using public transportation that
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
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a concequence
concequence
of Correct your spelling
consequence
dedicationg
more budget on Correct your spelling
dedicating
dedication
railways
, brings about cleaner ari
and Correct your spelling
air
also
fewer accidents. It is my firm conviction that the money was
spent on Unnecessary verb
apply
railways
should be more than roads.Submitted by niloofar_sk33 on
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