The table shows the number of people who took part in a national health survey between 2005 and 2009, answering questions about their sleeping habits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the number of people who took part in a national health survey between 2005 and 2009, answering questions about their sleeping habits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table presents the
figure
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for women and
men
from 2005 or 2009 that answered the questions about their sleeping habits in a national health way.
Overall
,
it is clear that
as the years went by, more and more people joined
this
investigation.
However
, there seems to be no trend for why the gender of participation was not always equal. As presented, 6,000 females attended in the year 2005, which was third as high as the number of males, despite doubling in the next year, figures for
men
dramatically soared to 36,000 and it accounted for three-fourths of all. One year later, there were as many as
men
and women (32,000). In the
last
two years, both
of
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genders showed tremendous increases, with 331,000 and 31,000 respondents, respectively,
which
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men
occupied nearly 10 per cent,
however
, the proportion of males rocketed to 50 per cent, and there was a decrease to only half of people were women.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.

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