Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
While
a number of people think that experts, for
instance
doctors and engineers, ought to be committed Add the comma(s)
instance,
the
country they Change preposition
to the
educated
and work there, others are inclined to believe that it should be up to them to choose anywhere they want in order to work. From my point of view, they should be able to Add a missing verb
are educated
making
their own choice. Change the verb
make
There
should not be under pressure Correct pronoun usage
They
while
thinking on
whether they would like to go overseas or stay.
Change preposition
about
Initially
, the reason why I think that way is because getting education
is not a privilege that governments present to them. Nurses or Add an article
an education
dentist
become specialists because Fix the agreement mistake
dentists
of
they earn to be one. They study hard and take exams to be better than their peers. Change preposition
apply
Although
states just give them opportunity
to be well-trained, they could find it in another country. Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
Furthermore
, providing education or good conditions to pupils are state's duty. What I mean is it is not something given, it is their right and they deserve to apply their decision. For example
, I would like to move to the UK as a veterinarian even I
Correct word choice
though I
educated
in Turkey.
Add a missing verb
am educated
Moreover
, if there would be
Wrong verb form
were
such
a regulation that commits professionals any
place Change preposition
to any
so as
to work, the science could not go Correct word choice
apply
further
point. All innovations link with sharing informations
we know. Conventional knowledge is the key feature. Giving an example the USA would or us would not have a chance to profit Change the wording
information
pieces of information
by
Einstein's Change preposition
from
wisedom
if the German government would restrict his movement during Correct your spelling
wisdom
world war
2, so, Correct your spelling
World War
deveoplments
require Correct your spelling
developments
development
exchange
of thoughts.
Add an article
an exchange
the exchange
To sum up
, it should be given a chance to specialists for maintaining
their occupation where they desire and Change preposition
to maintain
also
, it is a good way to increase scientific reforms.Submitted by fatmanurdonertas on
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Make sure to clearly structure your essay with a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint. Include a clear thesis statement in your intro.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to create better cohesion between your sentences and paragraphs. Also, use a range of cohesive devices such as pronouns, synonyms, and discourse markers.
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Support your main points with specific examples or explanations. This will make your argument stronger and more persuasive.
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Address both viewpoints presented in the prompt thoroughly. Make sure that your own opinion is also clearly stated and justified with sound reasoning.
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Check for grammar mistakes and vocabulary issues that may hinder the clarity of your ideas. Strive for accuracy in your language use.
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