Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their hometown. What are the advantage and disadvantage of this.

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who prefer to travel
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countries to study a outings
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of learning in their homeland has increased significantly.
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there are several advantages of travel abroad to
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, it can have some disadvantages as well. In
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foreign
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. The first merit of it is considered to be that learning a
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becomes easier by communicating with abroad
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. For instance, a person who has gone abroad
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not know
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. So
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population. Another positive aspect is thought to be that explore new worlds,
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cultures and gain knowledge.
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because it has been a rewarding journey that improved their communication skills and opened up new opportunities,
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they do know about
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.
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, despite
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positives, learning
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One of the major disadvantages of it is that
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should pay money for their daily expenses and
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they miss their family and friends. And longing
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for learning
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foreign
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. Another positive aspect is thought to be that their
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backward.
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because their hometown is not developing.
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compatriots
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too interested in
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abroad. And their
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reputation is reducing than other nation. In conclusion,
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can offer several positives, there may be some drawbacks too.
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Elaborate on your main points by providing specific examples and explanations. Each advantage and disadvantage mentioned should be supported with details.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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