Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

I have a
dream
to become a professional and lecturer at IPB University with a specialization in climate and earth. Lecturing is one of the jobs that requires a high level of specialization because a doctoral degree is required to become a lecturer at IPB University. The high qualification makes me obliged to continue my higher education to get the degree. Of course, I am very open to various fields of science related to me, especially the field of climate and earth sciences. I am very optimistic about my
dream
because I
also
have another big
dream
, which is to help educate the people of Indonesia so that there is no educational inequality. I have made
this
big
dream
since I was in high school and I will pursue these two things as much as I can.
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task achievement
Ensure you understand the task fully and address all parts of the prompt. Your essay did not discuss the views on whether economic progress is most important or if other forms of progress are equally important, which was the main requirement of the task.
coherence & cohesion
Develop a clear logical structure for your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs that discuss each view, and a conclusion that reflects your opinion as asked by the prompt.
task achievement
Support your points with relevant examples or explanations that are directly linked to the discussion of economic vs. other types of progress for a country.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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