The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Austra/ia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Austra/ia's share of the Japanese tourist market. 

Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
The graph illustrates the
number
of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between the years 1980 and 1996.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are four different types of factors producing noise to environmental Health authorities.
In addition
, between
this
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these
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16 years, the
number
of related
to
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apply
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years is evolving for
certains
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certain
and decreasing for others. Factories and domestic/household are definitively evolving, with 400
number of
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apply
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complaints for the year 1940 and ending with 1200 and
approximatively
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approximately
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800 in 1996.
Then
, these two different types
shows
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show
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an
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a
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significant evolution.
Also
, Road
works
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work
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begun
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began
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in 1980 with almost 600 and
end
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ended
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with only 100
number of
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apply
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complaints,
wich
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which
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is very
less
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low
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.
Instead
of traffic noise
who
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it
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is demonstrating a valued diminution, with 300 in 1980.
However
is it clear that in the year
1986
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1986,
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there is an
essentiel
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essential
evolution, ending with a
number
of 600
.
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?
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Who
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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a contrast between all trajectories.
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