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The line graph shows the size of the global population from 1400 to 2000, and the pie charts show the global population by region in 1900 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the size of the global population from 1400 to 2000, and the pie charts show the global population by region in 1900 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the
population
 in the world by
region
. The difference between the two is in the year; the first chart is in 1900,
while
, the other is in 2000. The unit measurement is in per cent.
To begin
 with, Africa was the only
region
who
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which
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 has had
experience
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experienced
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 growth, from 4% in 1900 to 10% in the year 2000.
However
, there was an additional
region
 in Africa,
which
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apply
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called the "Middle East and North Africa" with approximately 6% in the same year.
On the contrary
, the majority of other regions had decreased in
population
 in 2000. Despite still being the highest, Asia had a drop
about
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 6%.
This
region
also
have
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 had an additional
population
 from the
fromer
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former
 Soviet Asia. It was followed by Europe with a huge margin
up
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 to 40%.
Next,
in the middle, there was Latin America &
Carribean
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Caribbean
 with a mere 8%.
Furthermore
, North America and Others ranked the lowest with 4% on average.
Overall
, in general, the world
population
 has drastically grown after 10 decades with approximately 4.6 billion
increased
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increase
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.
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