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The 2 given tables illustrate the number of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas across 5 countries over a 5 years period, from 1999 to 2004.

The 2 given tables illustrate the number of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas across 5 countries over a 5 years period, from 1999 to 2004.
The 2 given tables illustrate the number of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and bananas across 5
countries
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 over a
5 years
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5-year
 period, from 1999 to 2004. In general, it can be seen that the
amount
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 of
coffee
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 sold in 5
countries
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 all grew
while
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 the
banana’s
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banana
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sales
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 increased in 3
countries
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 and fell in 2. It is
also
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 shown that the UK was always the top spender in both banana and
coffee
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. At first hand, the
amount
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 of
coffee
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 consumed in the UK has grown dramatically from 1.5
millions
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million
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 to 20
millions
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million
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 euros. Switzerland
also
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 witnessed the 3
million
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 increase in
coffee
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’s
sales
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 ranking it the top 2 in
this
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 table. After that, It can be seen that Belgium’s
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coffee’s
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coffee
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sales
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 went up slightly, around 0.7
million
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. Sweden and Denmark’s
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coffee’s
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coffee
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sales
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 saw nearly no
changed
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 Sweden went from 1.8 to 2
while
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 the other increased from 0.8 to 1
On the other hand
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, the
amount
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 of
banana’s
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banana
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sales
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 only increased in 3
countries
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 with the UK
also
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 the most contributed to the
amount
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 of
sales
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, from 15
million
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 to 47
million
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 euros, followed by Switzerland with a 4.5
increased
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 in
sales
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, Denmark only saw a minor changed from 0.6 to 4
million
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 euros. Sweden and Belgium were the two
countries
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 with the
amount
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 of
banana’s
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banana
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sales
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 dropped, with Sweden’s
sales
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 reduced from 2 to 0.9 and Belgium’s
sales
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 fell from 1.8 to 0.8.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, countries, amount, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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