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Nowadays, some international companies become more and more powerful. Some people think it is a negative development. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In
todays
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today's
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 world International shareholders
has
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have
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 become powerful
by
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for
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 many reasons
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while
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and
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 some
people
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belive
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believe
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that is
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a negetive
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negetive thrend
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negative trend
.In
this
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essay
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essay,
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i
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I
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wall
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will
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 be discussing
about
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apply
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this
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 matter with my ideas
containning
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containing
wether
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whether
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 to pros and cons.
Body paragraph 1
Mainly,In
nowwadays
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nowadays
 globe there is a vast number of
companies
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 that
alredy
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already
 take over the power of their demand with
bussines
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business
 and other
sytems
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systems
such
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 as
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the Red-cross
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Red-cross
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Red cross
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,
Ielts
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and Ielts
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 language company.
Furethmore
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Furthermore
companies
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 like Nasa and
enormus
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enormous
 car and
vehicale manifactures
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vehicle manufacturers
.
Body paragraph 2
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On
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In
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On
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the one
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one
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the one
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 hand, having strong and
powerfull
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powerful
 international
companies
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 are
helfull
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helpful
 to our
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day-to-day
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day to day
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day-to-day
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 life in some situations like having a new
virus like
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virus-like
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covid
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COVID
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.In 2021 when we first
discover
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discovered
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this
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disese
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disease
 the majority of
people
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have been
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were
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fraitned
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fraught
due to
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 the lack of sources of
medicine
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.
However
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, As a fortune
Nasa
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NASA
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 and some other main international
companies
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 have
workd
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worked
 without days off to find
out
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apply
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a perfect vacssinte to the globe.
Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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,With
this
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 new
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medicine
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medicine,
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 most
of
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apply
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goventments
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governments
government
has
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have
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 ruled
the
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that
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 civilations must have
this
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medicine
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 in order to run
a
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apply
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good
heath
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health
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 during the
pandamic
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pandemic
.In
related
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relation
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 to
this
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senario
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situation
 some of
major
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the major
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companies
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was
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were
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 looking to earn a decent amount of profit
while
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people
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are
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were
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 fighting to get
a
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apply
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medicine
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 for
a
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apply
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better and
smooth
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smoother
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lifesyle
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lives
.
Body paragraph 4
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 with
this
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example
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example,
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 we have profs that there are good and bad outcomes of having international
high-powerd
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high-powered
companies
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 in
social
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society
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.
Conclusion
In my
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opinion
oppnion
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oppnion,
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 I would agree that
govenments
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governments
government
 should have more power than other hyper
powerd
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powered
comapnies
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companies
 that
who
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apply
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are more
powerfull
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powerful
 than their county.
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However
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However,
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 the
companies
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 that
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are involed
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involed
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involved
 in
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the heathcare
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heathcare
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healthcare
streem
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stream
 should
may
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apply
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have some power
accrodingly
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accordingly
 if they carry a smooth running with the
govenmant
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government
 and
helping
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help
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 the
people
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.

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task response
Make sure your introduction includes a clear thesis statement outlining your position on the topic. This will guide the reader on what to expect in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your main points should each be presented in a separate paragraph with a clear topic sentence at the beginning. Ensure each paragraph elaborates on a single main idea to maintain coherence.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to convey your points more precisely. Avoid overly general terms or repetitive language.
task response
Your arguments need to be supported with specific examples or evidence. While you mentioned that powerful companies helped during the COVID pandemic, provide specific details and data if possible.
grammatical range and accuracy
Pay attention to accurate and complex sentence structures to improve grammatical range and accuracy. Avoid run-on sentences and sentence fragments.
grammatical range and accuracy
Check and correct all instances of spelling and grammatical errors. Incorrect verb forms, missing articles, and spelling mistakes can significantly lower your score.
coherence and cohesion
To improve coherence, use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and across paragraphs.
task response
You should write a conclusion that summarizes your main points and reiterates your position clearly, without introducing new ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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