The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The graph shows the figures of tourists
visting
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visiting
a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.The
totals
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total
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numebers
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numbers
number
of visitors staying on cruise ships and
that
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apply
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of
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staying on
island
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the island
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are
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is
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rising gradually every year. The 8-year period witnessed
a
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remarkable
overall
growth not significantly interrupted by the stagnant year of 2016. To break the growth of the total down to the two specific groups of visitors, one group increased from 0.7
million
to 2
million
, and the other from 0.3 to 1.5
million
. The
numebers
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numbers
number
of
wistiors
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visitors
staying on
crusise
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cruise
ships are not
steadily
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.It increased a half of
millions
of
vistors
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visitors
from 2010 to 2011.
Then
it
decline
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declined
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the
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to the
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same
numbers
in 2012.After that,the
numbers
rised
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rose
rise
raised
gradually from 0.5
millions
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million
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to
2miilions
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2 million
in 5 years. The
mumbers
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members
numbers
number
of
visitiors
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visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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are keep
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the same
numbers
from 2010 to 2011 .
Then
It increased1
millions
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million
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form
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from
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2011 to 2013.After that keep the same
numbers
for
3years
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3 years
.And
droped
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dropped
a half of
million
in one
years
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year
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.
Finally
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it kept the
numbers
in
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at
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1.5
millions
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million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, millions, numbers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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