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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.
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The line graph provides information about the
number
 of
visitors
 who visit international
museums
 from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
number
 of
Louvre
visitors
 slightly grew between 1980 and 2015.
while
 there was a significant increase in the
number
 of
visitors
of
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Vatican
Museums
 for the same period.
Moreover
, the
number
 of
visitors
 who visit
London
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the London
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Science
Museum
steady
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 decreased over
35-years
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35 years
whereas
 there was
a
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little change in the
number
 of
Shenzhen
Museum
visitors
 over 35 period
year
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years
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. Looking at the
visitors
 of
Louvre
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the Louvre
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 in more detail, it can be seen that it was about
7millions
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7 million
 in 1980 compared to around
5millions
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5 million
of
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Vatican
Museums
 of
visitors
, approximately
4.1millions
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4.1 million
 of
London
Science
Museum
visitors
 and roughly
2.9millions
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2.9 million
 of
Shenzhen
Museum
visitors
. The second worth pointing out is that the
number
 of
visitors
of
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to
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Shenzhen
Museum
 gradually fell until 2000, reaching
at
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nearly
2.5millions
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2.5 million
.
In contrast
, the figure for
visitors
of
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to
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Vatican
Museums
 changed
while
 the
number
 of
Vatican
Museums
visitors
 showed a jump from about
5millions
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5 million
 to around
7.9millions
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7.9 million
.
Moreover
, there was a sharp drop in
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the figure
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figure
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figures
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 for
visitors
of
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to
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London
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the London
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Science
Museum
. Turning to
result
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the result
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, it can be seen that the
number
 of
visitors
of
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to
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Louvre
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the Louvre
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 was higher than others in 2015 at about
9millions
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9 million
, which was the highest point in
this
 graph.
To sum up
, the
number
 of
visitors
of
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to
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Louvre
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the Louvre
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 was higher than others from the beginning to the end.
while
 the figure of
visitors
of
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to
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Shenzhen
Museum
 was lower than
other
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the other
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 three international
museums
 at the beginning,
however
, the
number
 of
London
Science
Museum
visitor
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visitors
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 was smaller than
other
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the other
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 three international
museums
 as
times
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time
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goes
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 by.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museums, louvre, vatican, london, science, museum, shenzhen, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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