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The chart shows data about the type of books that people under 30 years old read

The chart shows data about the type of books that people under 30 years old read
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The table shows us how many
books
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 were read by people aged 16 to 29 in 2012 and the chart illustrates the kind of
book
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 they read, whether it is audio, electronic, or hardcover
book
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.
Overall
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, we can see that most readers prefer a hard-cover
book
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 in all
age
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 groups. The audiobook and e-
book
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have
Verb problem
are
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a
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apply
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slight difference
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slightly different
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 from each other.
Furthermore
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, only a small portion of them do not read
books
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 which will be explained more in the next paragraph. Each person aged 16 or 17 reads about 12
books
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 on average with only 10% outliers who do not read.
Moreover
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, those between 18 to 24 years old, read 11
books
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 on average which is the same amount as the people above that
age
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 group. There is only a 2% difference between them, which tells us there is a similarity in their
book
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-reading habit.
In addition
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, almost 90% of the younger
age
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 group read a print
book
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. The latter
age
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 groups
also
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 prefer that kind of
book
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, with around 70% of readers. E-
books
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 took the second place but there is a dramatic difference between them.
Lastly
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, the audiobook was not a favourite by most of the readers because none
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reached
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 20% of votes.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, book, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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