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Some people feel that high school students should only learn literature from their own country, while others feel that they should be exposed to literature from around the world. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 to hold water. But
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 reasoned conclusion, let us discuss
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reasons why some people feel that
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both viewpoints hold water. It is difficult to favour one argument. But I do feel that________.
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introduction conclusion present
The essay lacks a clear introduction with a precise thesis statement. Be sure to provide a specific position or opinion at the beginning.
supported main points
The body paragraphs are incomplete and lack clear topic sentences and supporting details. Ensure each paragraph elaborates on a single main idea with relevant examples and explanations.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion is vague and does not summarize the key points of the essay or restate your opinion clearly. Work on tying together your arguments and presenting a strong, conclusive stance.
complete response
Your response does not effectively address the essay prompt. Make sure to discuss both views and provide your own opinion with clear and comprehensive explanations.
logical structure
There is a lack of coherence due to the absence of proper linking phrases and transitions. Improve the logical flow of information by using cohesive devices between sentences and paragraphs.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural identity
  • National values
  • Cultural roots
  • Sense of identity
  • Historical context
  • Broadened perspectives
  • Open-mindedness
  • Diverse worldviews
  • Language proficiency
  • Global citizenship
  • Human experiences
  • Comprehensive education
  • Balanced curriculum
  • Global narratives
  • Rich literary traditions
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