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The table below shows personal saving as a percentage of personal income for selected countries in 1970, 1990 and 2010.

The table below shows personal saving as a percentage of personal income for selected countries in 1970, 1990 and 2010.
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The table displays personal information about saving of personal incomes in
countries
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 as Canada, France, Germany, Italy, Japan, UK, USA in the years 1970, 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
countries
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 with high percentages, were Italy in first place, following Japan and France and the
countries
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 with the lowest data were Canada and USA. In 1970, Italy got the highest
percentage
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 compared with other
countries
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, and in other years, keeping the same position in 1990, which declined an insignificant
percentage
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 to later in 2000 got down to 11,4. Japan and France were the
countries
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 were a high
percentage
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, getting the same equal
percentage
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 of 13.6. Throughout history, those
countries
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 kept the same values consecutively. the country with the lowest
percentage
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 was Canada with 5.6 in 1970 and later in grew sharply to 11.5 in 2000 dropped significantly to 1.9.
also
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,
USA
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the USA
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 kept
to
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apply
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fluctuating in their percentages, being 1970 the year with the biggest
percentage
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 in comparison with others.
However
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,
UK
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the UK
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 got a little variation between those years, as
same
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some
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 of Germany
keeping
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kept
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 the same data in 1970 and 1990 to decrease
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by almos
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almos
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almost
 2.3 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 8 times.
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