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the map below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particularly university

the map below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particularly university
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Student numbers
of
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 the biology school are predicted to rise for the next couple of years. To
accomodate
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accommodate
this
 increase, the faculty made a
siteplan
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site plan
of
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 their future area development.
Firstly
, it is noticeable that
,
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 the green space between the road and
indoor
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the indoor
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 sports hall is predicted to be the lab and the office
centre
, providing more facilities for student's necessities.
In addition
, the green space
on
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 the south is planned to be the new car park
specifying
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 for employees.
However
, the building next to the central library which is the drama
centre
, is expected to be relocated
as
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 the music
centre
. The rest
the
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 building's function will
stayed
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 as it
supposed
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 to be, yet it will be constructed to be larger and
connecting
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 to each other.
For instance
, the teaching building which is expected to be two
as well as
 the lecture room.
Lastly
, the cafe will be moved a few meters to the left
due to
 the lecture room's space needs, and the IT
centre
 will be bigger as the increase of student numbers.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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