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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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At
this
 time, fast
food
are
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 becoming very popular and familiar to people in many countries. People
eating
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eat
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 too much
them
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of them
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 and
getting
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 many health diseases from that. In my opinion, there are two sides to agree and disagree about imposing a higher tax on
this
 type of
food
. On the one hand, fast
food
included
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 many fat, carbs and a lot of bad things that can affect
to
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people’s health. If they consume them
to
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too
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 much, they will get some diseases like obesity,
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and allergy
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allergy
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allergies
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, … If governments put a higher tax, they will get stuck
about
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on
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 the
prize
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price
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, because it can cost a lot of money from their earn living and the number of eating fast
food
 will go down.
However
, It can’t be denied that junk
food
are
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 very convenient for people.
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, when you don’t have time to make a meal, you can buy
some thing
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something
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 to eat like hamburgers and chicken to eat.
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Develop a more structured essay by presenting a clear introduction that states your opinion, followed by body paragraphs that explain your reasons and a concluding paragraph that summarizes your position. Make sure your essay flows logically from one point to the next.
task achievement
Fully address the task by presenting a clear opinion on whether you agree or disagree with the imposition of higher taxes on fast food. Provide more developed arguments and relevant examples to support your viewpoint. Ensure you have a conclusion that restates your overall stance.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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