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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
The given line graph illustrates the comparison
amount
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 of
a
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apply
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three distinct fast
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food
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foods
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that
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is
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have been
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 eaten by people in the UK over three decades.
Overall
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, fish and chips became the
most
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fastest
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 growing fast
food
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to
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consumed by
UK's
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UK
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residences
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residents
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 between 1970 and 1990. In the beginning, pizza was the most consumed fast
food
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by
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hitted
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hitting
 300 as its peak
amount
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. People in the UK chose fish and chips as their second option
food
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 to buy with just under 100. Meanwhile,
hamburger
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the hamburger
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 was the least frequent
food
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 eaten and
it
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they
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 reached the lowest
amount
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 being bought
with
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at
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 around 50. In 1990, fish and chips showed a significant increase to
became
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become
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 the most consumed fast
food
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 as high as 500.
Similarly
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,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 constantly uplifted which reached its highest
amount
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 sold at almost 300.
Although
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 those two fast foods experienced an uptrend, a downtrend
occured
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occurred
occurs
 on the pizza that had been consumed by only
got
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around 200.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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