When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Dwellers
healthy
has been a controlversary problem back at the age to now, Replace the word
health
people
often stay at home and starring
at the screen all the time. But nowadays, we often see more public Verb problem
stare
parks
and sports
facilities
rather than shopping centers
. I totally agree with Change the spelling
centres
this
statement and this
essay will talk about it.
On the one hand, public parks
provide a space for relaxation, excercise
, and community bonding, which enhances Correct your spelling
exercise
quality
of life. Add an article
the quality
Besides
, Correct article usage
the sendentary
sendentary
lifestyle has become a big issue Correct your spelling
sedentary
toward
Change preposition
for
youngster
, which is not often going out and Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
touch
some grass and Wrong verb form
touching
this
planning can be a big change toward
them. Change preposition
for
Sports
facilities
promote physical health and can potentially reduce healthcare costs by encouraging an active lifestyle .For instance
, their friends, whom
Correct pronoun usage
who
very
interested in Add a missing verb
are very
sport
can make them Fix the agreement mistake
sports
going
out Wrong verb form
go
instead
of staying at home for the benefit of their own body
. Public Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
parks
and sports
facilities
can serve as green spaces, helping to counteract urban heat islands and contributing to enviromental
sustainability. Shopping Correct your spelling
environmental
centers
often lead to increased traffic and pollution, Change the spelling
centres
whereas
parks
and sports
facilities
tend to have a lower enviromental
impact. Having access to natural spaces can improve mental health, reduce stress and foster a sense of well-being among residents.
Correct your spelling
environmental
On the other hand
, shopping centers can create more job
for the lower grade Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
people
, who not often has
a good chance to get in touch with good Correct subject-verb agreement
have
job
. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
For example
, the mopper usually get
a good sign Change the verb form
gets
of
other Change preposition
from
people
who come to see stuff, they will be praise
Wrong verb form
praised
at the end
of the day and get the
respect from other Correct article usage
apply
people
. It's like a good working enviroment
for Correct your spelling
environment
elderly
, who often Correct article usage
the elderly
feeling
alone and Change the form of the verb
feel
not
have Add a missing verb
do not
much thing
to do in a day. Change the quantifier
many things
Although
the wage is not as much as other working people
, this
is still a good choice for someone who get
Change the verb form
gets
desparate
from life and just Correct your spelling
desperate
separated
want
to communicate, Change the verb form
wants
stay
in a social Change the verb form
stays
enviroment
to get better and learn from them.
In conclusion, both Correct your spelling
environment
parks
, sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
and mall
have Fix the agreement mistake
malls
adventages
and Correct your spelling
advantages
disavantages
but without them or which one Correct your spelling
disadvantages
become
lower, Change the verb form
becomes
the
ordinary life will be Correct article usage
apply
Correct article usage
a fluaction
fluaction
and someday Correct your spelling
fluctuation
and
not get a good result from it.Correct pronoun usage
we and
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