a person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social and material possessions. old- fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
Literature
is an important part of education, there are groups of people that
believe high school Correct pronoun usage
who
student
should only learn Fix the agreement mistake
students
literature
from the country
they hail from and then
there are those that
believe students should be able to learn from any Correct pronoun usage
who
literature
they want, including those that are foreign. In my personal opinion, Students should be able to learn literature
from whichever country
they choose.
On one
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the one
hand
I see the advantages of studying written Add a comma
hand,
works
of your nationality. People often disregard national
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nationally
publish
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published
works
for international text because they feel domestic works
are not diverse and uncultured. Yet, they are missing out on some amazing writing. I find that my own country
of Indonesia has some of the best published
books and I would have Add a hyphen
best-published
been
missed them if I had not given them a chance. Unnecessary verb
apply
However
, there are not many published works
from my country
, therefore
if I was limited to only study
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studying
inhouse
text I have little to learn from.
On that note, foreign Correct your spelling
in-house
literature
has wide
range of publications, Add an article
a wide
learning
from them would be greatly beneficial because that means Correct word choice
and learning
Add an article
the student
a student
student
will Fix the agreement mistake
students
be expose
to all types of Change the verb form
be exposed
works
. Enhancing their knowledge. But, there is a danger of exposing student
to Fix the agreement mistake
students
works
that are unfit. For
example
one book that came to mind is Mein Add a comma
example,
kampf
by Adolf Hitler. Those Change the capitalization
Kampf
type
of books could spark racist and white Fix the agreement mistake
types
supremist
thoughts from a young adolescent.
In conclusion, in regard to Correct your spelling
supremacist
weather
a minor should learn from domestic books only or from international printed Correct your spelling
whether
works
, I believe a student
should be able to study from
any Change preposition
apply
literature
they want for the good out way the bad.Submitted by andhitdamanik999 on
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task achievement
Ensure that your essay stays focused on the topic given; the essay presented discusses the value of literature rather than addressing material and social possessions and old-fashioned values such as honour, kindness, and trust.
coherence and cohesion
Work on providing a clear and structured introduction to the topic, making sure to introduce the specific question being addressed. The conclusion should also reflect back on the points made and restate your position clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Develop supported main points with specific examples that are clearly linked to the question at hand. The mention of Indonesian literature is a good approach; however, ensure all examples are relevant to the topic being discussed.
coherence and cohesion
More clearly structure your essay with clear paragraphs, each one presenting a single idea that is introduced, explained, and concluded. Use transition words to ensure the flow between paragraphs.
task achievement
Avoid straying into unrelated topics and ensure examples used are relevant to the subject of worth being judged by material possessions versus old-fashioned values. The Mein Kampf example appears to be off-topic.
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