the map below show village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010
The two maps display different situations in the Village of Stokeford in 1930 and after 8 decades
The northern side of the village had experienced a drastic transformation since 1930. Back in 1930, the land right beside the river stoke was built
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farmland, Correct your spelling
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, in 2013 all of those have been reconstructed into various houses. Linking Words
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, in the east area opposite of houses, there was a newly built retirement home. Linking Words
Furthermore
, the roads had been expanded with more connected roads to each area.
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In contrast
to the southern side, there have not been drastic transformations except the destruction of farmland and shops into the housing areas. Linking Words
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the roads were similar to the northern with various expansions and connections to every place. Linking Words
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, one thing that stood out was the school which was not connected to houses again.
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Overall
, the Village of Stokeford has had a massive transformation after 80 years. In 2010, there were no farmland, shops, and gardens.Linking Words
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