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Some people believe that reading books is more worthwhile than exploring the internet. Discuss both views

Nowadays, in the contemporary era,
people
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 can search for
information
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 about anything they looking for easily by exploring the
internet
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, and
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 is more and more practical rather than by reading a
book
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.
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, some
people
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 argue that reading
books
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 is more useful. The following essay will discuss both points of view and present my point of view. On one hand, it is undeniable that the
internet
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 has given
people
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 greater access to knowledge than ever before. They can search for
information
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 about a topic from many sources quickly and easily by using the
internet
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.
Furthermore
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, it is cheaper to do because
people
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 do not have to go to a bookstore and spend their money to buy
books
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.
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, by using the
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, students can browse and explore Google to find out
information
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 and complete their homework practically. Many others,
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, are opposed and convinced that reading a
book
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 is more beneficial than exploring the
internet
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.
This
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 argument is understandable because since a few decades ago before the
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 was worldwide used than now,
books
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 have been a great source of
information
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, particularly for students.
Besides
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 that, a science
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 ,
for example
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, was written by experts so that the contents and explanations in the
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 are considered more accurate. In conclusion,
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 of reading
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 as I mentioned above, exploring the
internet
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 is more and more worthwhile for some reasons.
Due to
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 the contemporary era nowadays, searching for
information
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 by exploring the
internet
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 is more practical and cheaper rather than reading
books
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.

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coherence cohesion
Make sure to clearly structure your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each body paragraph should focus on a single main idea, which should be introduced at the beginning.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and sentences within paragraphs, as well as to link paragraphs together, to enhance the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Ensure your essay responds directly to the prompt, covering both views equally before presenting your own opinion.
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Use more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points. This can help demonstrate the validity of your claims and improve the strength of your argument.
task achievement
Even though your conclusion is clear, it would benefit from being more aligned with the preceding argumentation, reflecting the discussion of both views, before reasserting your own stance.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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