The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information about the yearly expenditure of three bakeries in London over a
period
of 10
years
from 2000 to 2010
Overall
, It’s clear to see that the annual earnings of Robbia’s Bakery and Barnie’s Buns showed an upward trend.
While
Lovely
Loaves
experience a downward trend in
the
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yearly earnings throughout the
period
.
To begin
with, the yearly
income
for Robbia’s Bakery was around 58.000
Pounds
in 2000, and it remained stable for the next four
years
, In 2005 it increased
around
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60.000
Pounds
.
Subsequently
, It still increased for the next two
years
around
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100.000
Pounds
, and it occupied around 102.000
Pounds
in
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at
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the end of the
period
, As for Lovely
loaves
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Loaves
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, the yearly
income
in 2000 was 20.000
Pound
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.
However
, for the next two
years
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it increased
about
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by about
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40.000
Pounds
in 2003 and it remained stable for the next four
years
, In 2007 it increased dramatically above 60.000
Pound
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Pounds
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at the end
of the graph in 2010. The annual
income
for Lovely
loaves
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Loaves
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was the highest at the beginning around 80.000
Pounds
.
In addition
, for the next five
years
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it fluctuated, and it plunged to 40.000
Pounds
in
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at
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the end of the
period
, which means Lovely
Loaves
had the lowest
income
of all three bakeries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, years, loaves, income, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.

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