The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.
The graph gives information about the yearly
income
of three bakeries in London during the 10-year period. Units are measured by the pound.
overall
, it is evident that the earnings of money by the year in Lovely Loavens
bakery
significantly declined,
while
Berrse’s Buns
bakery
vires a virsa increased dramatically.
whereas
Robbie’s
Bakery
significantly increased their
income
. First of all, Lovely Loavens
bakery
commenced with a total
income
of £80,000. After that, there was a considerable decline in 2005 to slightly above £60,000. The following year was a sharp decrease
then
became steady from in the
last
two years by £40,000 annually.
Whereas
The annual earrings of Berrse’s Buns
bakery
started with £20,000. Followed by a slight incline in 2002.
Then
became stable with a total
income
of around £40.000 in 2007.In the
last
3 years upward with above £60,000 yearly. The annual
income
of the Robbies
Bakery
begins under £60,000 it was steadily until 2005.
Moreover
, there was a significant rise in their earning recorded by nearly
to
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£100,000 in 2008
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