The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.
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The graph gives information about the yearly
income
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of three bakeries in London during the 10-year period. Units are measured by the pound.
overall
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, it is evident that the earnings of money by the year in Lovely Loavens
bakery
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significantly declined,
while
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Berrse’s Buns
bakery
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vires a virsa increased dramatically.
whereas
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Robbie’s
Bakery
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significantly increased their
income
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. First of all, Lovely Loavens
bakery
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commenced with a total
income
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of £80,000. After that, there was a considerable decline in 2005 to slightly above £60,000. The following year was a sharp decrease
then
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became steady from in the
last
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two years by £40,000 annually.
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The annual earrings of Berrse’s Buns
bakery
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started with £20,000. Followed by a slight incline in 2002.
Then
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became stable with a total
income
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of around £40.000 in 2007.In the
last
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3 years upward with above £60,000 yearly. The annual
income
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of the Robbies
Bakery
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begins under £60,000 it was steadily until 2005.
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, there was a significant rise in their earning recorded by nearly
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£100,000 in 2008
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, bakery with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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