The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
The bar graph depicts the comparison of spending
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on commodities between
United
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the United
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Kingdom (
UK
) and
France
in 2010 and measured in
poundsterling
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pound sterling
pounds sterling
. From an overview perspective, it can be seen that almost all of the
expenditure
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expenditures
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of
UK
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the UK
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higher
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are higher
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than
France
, except computers and
perfume
.
To begin
with, both
countries
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country's
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majority spent their money on cars with
notable
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difference
50.000
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of 50.000
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poundsterling
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pound sterling
UK
spent higher than
France
at around 450.000 and 400.000, respectively.
Moreover
, books and cameras followed similar trajectories with significant
difference
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differences
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.
Additionally
,
UK
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the UK
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purchased 350.000
poundsterling
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pound sterling
for a year, greatly outstripping
France
's budgetary concern on cameras which
only
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150.000 (a 200.000 difference). Among these,
UK
's budget usage for
perfume
and
France
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France's
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expenditure for cameras
were
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the lowest spending in 2010. Another notable
information
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is
the
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that
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France
disbursed much more money than
UK
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the UK
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for computers and
perfume
. For
computers
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computer
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disbursement, both countries devoted their money at around 350.000-380.000
while
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the insignificant
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budget was for
perfume
at around 200.000 and 150.000 for
France
and
UK
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the UK
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, perfume with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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