Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the present world, information technology is more developed and still on the rise.
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and social media are owned by everyone Use synonyms
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different ages and statuses including teenagers. Change preposition
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phenomenon leads to a decrease in real-life socialization because they prefer to spend their Linking Words
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essay will discuss why Linking Words
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the solution.
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with, the development of technology brings many advantages to our daily lives. It helps us to connect with other Linking Words
people
from different nations, learn new knowledge and gather the information we need. Use synonyms
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real-life
due to
the comfort it offers in online socialization. Linking Words
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could be a disaster as many young Linking Words
people
will lose their skills to interact with other Use synonyms
people
directly. Use synonyms
Moreover
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can affect them not only mentally but Linking Words
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physically because they spend most of their Linking Words
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at home without fresh air and sun exposure.
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However
, we can take several solutions to overcome Linking Words
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problem. The practical solution is to reduce their daily screen Linking Words
time
on Use synonyms
smartphones
or any communication devices. And accommodate them to spend more Use synonyms
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such
as running, jogging, and walking. One of the reasons why most Linking Words
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teenagers
are
really dependent on their phone is because Change the verb form
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smartphones
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time
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other
activity
including reading a book, planting, and spending more Fix the agreement mistake
activities
time
with family and friends can help them become less addicted to Use synonyms
smartphones
and socialize more with other Use synonyms
people
in real life.
In conclusion, virtual communication is not bad but us and teenagers. But, we need to balance it with our real-life interactions and intimate face-to-face communication with our friends and family.Use synonyms
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