Working abroad is increasingly popular among the young people in Myanmar. Do the advantages of working abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

A growing number of youths from Myanmar choose to
work
overseas.
While
there is obviously a benefit to choosing to
work
overseas, I believe that there are more advantages than disadvantages. They can get a high salary and good overseas working experiences;
on the other hand
, they can feel homesick for being away from their
home
. On the one hand,most nations can provide good salaries. That's why a worker from Myanmar can get a higher salary than in their local area.
For instance
, an electrical engineer's salary range in Singapore is 10 times higher than in Myanmar.
Moreover
, international experiences may help individuals become more professional in their careers. Simply because most of the overseas
work places
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are built with different nationalities. Working with them may improve their flexibility and understanding of other people’s working nature and culture.
For example
, when they
work
together with
Japanese people,they will know how Japanese people are very detailed on each individual thing and accurate on the timeline.
On the other hand
, those people may miss
home
while
working in other countries.
This
is
possibly
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because an individual may have been isolated in an unfamiliar environment. One
such
example is that a person who works in Japan may have to eat Japanese food in their daily life, which makes them yearn for the food from
home
.
To conclude
, homesickness is a common issue for being away from
home
, but
the
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high income and getting good international working experiences are advantages.
Therefore
, there are more upsides to working abroad than downsides.
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